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- AU information: You did go into some detail about Cilan's role in this AU, but we would like to hear more about it, specifically how this AU compares to how the events in the original universe went.
- Personality: We felt that Cilan's personality was very short, and what was written did not give us a clear enough image of the kind of person Cilan is. We would like to see a more well-rounded character, with his personality traits expanded on. In addition, we would like to see a compare-and-contrast to his OU personality, highlighting how the AU has changed how he acts.
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Date: 2013-11-04 01:29 am (UTC)Thank you for applying at The Bastion. Before we can accept you, there are a few points we need clarified.
- AU information: You did go into some detail about Cilan's role in this AU, but we would like to hear more about it, specifically how this AU compares to how the events in the original universe went.
- Personality: We felt that Cilan's personality was very short, and what was written did not give us a clear enough image of the kind of person Cilan is. We would like to see a more well-rounded character, with his personality traits expanded on. In addition, we would like to see a compare-and-contrast to his OU personality, highlighting how the AU has changed how he acts.
- Powers: Your application states that he has two pokemon, but then gives details for three, with the third being a 'family pokemon'. We just want clarification on if all three pokemon will be coming to the Bastion with him or not.
- Formatting: Please go through and check your formatting. We know that sometimes spacing can be messed up when copying text over from a word processor to dreamwidth, so be sure to fix the formatting, spacing, and paragraph breaks.
You have 72 hours to post your revisions. Please post them as a reply to this comment.
If you have any questions about the revision request, please feel free to contact us.