Thank you for applying at The Bastion. Before we can accept you, there are a few points we need clarified.
- The personality section is very short. You do mention several traits, but we would like to see more about him. In addition, we would like to see more about why Ippo is the way he is. You say he is kind and helpful, and that changes to cold and aggressive in the ring. What causes him to change like that? How do the changes affect him outside of the ring? How do the victories within the ring change him as a person? Use examples from canon to show Ippo's traits and how he came to be who he is.
- Ippo's 'fighting spirit' ability would have to be changed to fit within the power restrictions for this game. Please edit that part of the powers section to include that information. (His special punches would not have to be altered to fit into the power restrictions, so they do not have to be included in the edits.)
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Thank you for applying at The Bastion. Before we can accept you, there are a few points we need clarified.
- The personality section is very short. You do mention several traits, but we would like to see more about him. In addition, we would like to see more about why Ippo is the way he is. You say he is kind and helpful, and that changes to cold and aggressive in the ring. What causes him to change like that? How do the changes affect him outside of the ring? How do the victories within the ring change him as a person? Use examples from canon to show Ippo's traits and how he came to be who he is.
- Ippo's 'fighting spirit' ability would have to be changed to fit within the power restrictions for this game. Please edit that part of the powers section to include that information. (His special punches would not have to be altered to fit into the power restrictions, so they do not have to be included in the edits.)
You have 72 hours to post your revisions. Please post them as a reply to this comment.
If you have any questions about the revision request, please feel free to contact us.